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Friday, March 24, 2023

Screenwriting 101: Timing tips

Screenwriting 101: One page doesn’t always equal one minute.

 

Most screenwriters are taught that one page of script equals one minute of screen time.  But that is a misnomer.  Timing depends on the amount of dialog versus action.  But more importantly, it depends on the director and actors involved; they are the ones who set the blocking and delivery of the lines. 

Scenes, which focus primarily on dialogue, more closely align with the one-page-one-minute concept.  These scenes open with a general description, which sets the stage.  Unless specifically written, the director and actors will set both blocking and emotional motivation. Both determine the context of how the lines are delivered.  The perfect illustration is how the different actors, who played James Bond, said the classic line “Bond, James Bond.”  Each of the actors had a unique tempo, which was only slightly altered by the scene settings.  Emotions and actions always affect how lines are delivered.   Strong emotions and intense actions will slow down the dialogue in some situations by creating necessary pauses, while fear and anger increase the speed of others.  The interactions between the character, whether with overlapping lines or long pauses between them, will either shorten or length the scene.

However, scenes that focus primarily on action might be described in a few sentences, yet they will run for several minutes on the screen.  For example:

The crowd’s cheers rapidly became gasps of horror as Jackson and Drake's cars murderously battle for the lead.  Using the other vehicles as weapons, they played bumper cars with each trying to knock the other off the track.

These two lines could very easily run for two to three minutes on the screen.  Without a word of dialogue, the scene and the motivation are set.  Nothing needs to be said.  Their actions speak louder than any words could convey.  The final length would be determined by how explicit the director wanted to make the violence and if there are intercutting scenes, which reveal actors inside the cars.

Most scenes combine both dialogue and action.  The following scene from my dark comedy, Completely Loyal to Me.  It’s just shy of two pages.  According to the formula, it should run for two minutes.  However, the action and reactions of the characters would more than double the screen time.  Walking and running on beach sand while trying to catch someone, who doesn’t want to be caught isn’t easy and will quickly lead to exhaustion.  The lines would be interspersed with action with the delivery becoming increasingly slower as actors portrayed the characters become breathless and tired.

 

EXT. BEACH: DAY

Cheryl and Karen walk down the beach. Lynne runs toward them from the other direction.

CHERYL

You are so grounded.

LYNNE

(excited)

I have proof!

CHERYL

You promised mom and dad--

LYNNE

But I have proof!

CHERYL

You broke your word!

LYNNE

Just listen!

KAREN

Let’s go home.

LYNNE

(Pulling away)

No! I won’t!

CHERYL

We’ll drag you back.

KAREN

We who? Don’t look at me.

 

Cheryl tries to grab Lynne. She eludes them. In a keystone cop chase, Cheryl and Karen try to catch her.

 

KAREN

Damn! She’s fast!

LYNNE

(frustrated)

Promise you’ll listen!

CHERYL

Do you want to be arrested?

KAREN

Arrested? Wait a minute. Just her? Right?

LYNNE

Just listen.

CHERYL

I will--at home!

Lynne continues to elude them.

LYNNE

NO! We have to go to the lighthouse.

KAREN

No! It’s off-limits.

LYNNE

But we have to.

CHERYL

Why? Why do we have to go there?

LYNNE

That’s where he went.

CHERYL

Who?

Lynne points up at the mansion.

CHERYL

If we don’t find anything, do you pinkie swear to stop playing Nancy Drew?

 

With one hand behind her back, Lynne offers her pinkie.

 

CHERYL (CONT.)

Let’s see your other hand.

 

Lynne shows her other and uncrosses her fingers.

 

CHERYL (CONT.)

Let’s go.

KAREN

(whining)

My feet hurt.

 

The dialogue implies the action and emotion of the characters, but it also gives the actors and director a great deal of leeway to enhance the action and emotions, especially for the actor playing the eight-year-old Lynne.  The comedic possibilities would be nearly endless as the twenty-somethings try to capture her  Realistically the scene would run about three and a half minutes.  Running it too short would stunt the humor; too long would be overkill.

 

 

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Friday, February 3, 2023

When love is forever, death is only the beginning: will it lead to forgiveness or revenge?

  


Never Can Say Good-bye tells the parallel storylines of the past and the present as the reincarnated souls are forced to decide between forgiveness and seeking the revenge they were denied in the past.


INT. RAMSDELL LIVING ROOM: NIGHT

Amanda talks on the phone.  Michael nervously paces.  He touches the repaired damage on the grand piano.    

                AMANDA

        (frustrated)

    I already asked him. She doesn't let people get close to her.  

Amanda watches Michael.  He stares up at Sara Jane's portrait.

                AMANDA (CONT.)

    Daniel, I have to call you back.

She hangs up the phone.

                MICHAEL

        (without turning around)

    The memories are getting more intense.

                AMANDA

    I knew they would.

                MICHAEL

    I have to know the whole truth. 

                AMANDA

    You will when it is time.

                MICHAEL

        (touching the piano)

     This is Sara Jane's.

Amanda nods.

                MICHAEL (CONT.)

    She loved music. 

                AMANDA

    Both her and Mother. It was their secret language. They were so close.  Sometimes I would get               jealous. They would always just seem to know and find a way to include me.  They'd make up a silly     rhythm...

Amanda becomes momentarily lost in the pleasant memory.

                MICHAEL

    She loved the guitar I bought her.

        (indicating the piano)

    But this was special to her.

                AMANDA

    It was a gift from Mother.  Father was furious when she took it with her.  But it was hers to take. 

                MICHAEL

        (pleading)

    Where is she?

                AMANDA

    It's not my place to interfere.   

                MICHAEL

    Where is Sara Jane?

                AMANDA

    I can't answer that.

                MICHAEL

        (angrily)

    Can't or won't?

                AMANDA

    Sara Jane might not be ready to deal with the past.  I'm not even sure you are.

                MICHAEL

    What if she can't forgive me?  What if she can't love me again. She begged. I couldn't let her leave.  

                AMANDA

    Could you now, if it was best for her?

                MICHAEL

    I don't know.

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Wednesday, January 18, 2023

Romance intertwines with ghosts, cults, and karmic justice


Again, Rachael was caught off guard. She spun around to face a woman with golden red hair streaked with gray and white. Her face was lined yet appeared vibrant, as was her whole stature. She was slender and strong; her posture carried no signs of the age that her face and hair implied.
"Who are you?" Rachael turned to meet her squarely. "How is it that you appear outside the sacred circle?"
Her arms gracefully spread. "This is-was my home. I could not leave until another had come to be its guardian."
"You’re Kevin’s Grandmother?"
She nodded. "You may call me Grandmother if you wish."
"No. Thank you."
"As you wish. Then Sarah. That is what I was called before I died." She pointed to the kettle. "Your water is nearly ready and my time is short."
"Are you looking for justice?"
Again, she nodded. "That and more.’